Life

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Life

Post by ~BrokenDown~ » Wed Mar 30, 2011 4:40 pm

LIFE



Life is really nothing, like air or a warm gust of wind.

It is so fragile yet intricately complex.

Its an ember,

a shimmer of light.

So intriguing and incomprehensible.

No words or pictures could place the fragile beauty

or the wonder and vigor of life,

nor could express the sorrow of death.

such is the bond of life, the sudden wrenching of death

and the fragile thread that separates them.

That ripping silence the endless void,

That shimmer the ember is suddenly gone.



I wrote this one a wile ago. it's one of my favorites.
"Life is not the cards you hold.. its how well you play them."

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Post by AlaaAbuali » Wed Mar 30, 2011 4:51 pm

It's very good, very descriptive. But I felt as though it was more of a paragraph or prose, then it is a poem. But either ways, I enjoyed it. I loved your choice of words. Keep it up!
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Re: Life

Post by ~BrokenDown~ » Wed Apr 06, 2011 1:48 pm

Thank you for your feed back <img src='http://www.helpingteens.org/groups/publ ... /smile.gif' class='bbc_emoticon' alt=':)' />. i agree its more of a creative description than a structured poem. I will keep writing!!
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